Yuuki's Arts ForFun!

[Aaronock]

I'm about to probably come off like a huge dick since everyone in this topic has been so ZOMG amazing art, but I gotta say it, you got some serious issues with proportions on the body.??I'm going to suggest you really take a look at a human figure book (one of real human bodies not some crappy anime figure book).??

I can probably talk for awhile on each one, but I'll concentrate on the Icey one since it had the most obvious and hard hitting issues for me.??Anyway I did what I normally do with Story's work when I feel like critiquing and went into MS paint to touch on issues I saw as best as I could just in case my explanations of stuff suck.

I'm getting the feeling you try to draw for perfection the first or second round.??The head on Icey is horribly small compared to her very large body.??Also the head is tilted in such a way that seems slightly improbable due to placement of the neck.??I didn't get this part totally right with drawing the head how it should be I admit, I think the chin or something is off with the head placement however and that her view should be more staring onward rather than at an angle.

The wings are tilted but...the shoulders aren't?...I'm a bit confused but didn't bother to touch the wings when doing edits (forgot mostly but wanted to note it).??Anyway with the body being big I decided to show you what I meant in matching it with the head into proportion.??I didn't touch the hand much on the right side due to that being a?more stylistic thing but drew a blue circle there to mostly help with my placing stuff.

Anyway okay done with the critiquing let's say some nice stuff.??I actually like the way you handle linework on the computer overall.??its not very often you see the quality of line work you have.??It has a general movement to it which is really a nice touch.??If you actually sit down and really work your linework out before you go all out with the finished linework I think you'll start making a lot of progress. I also like how you handle textures overall, the wings are feathery, the clothing flows overall okay, and hair flows nice too.

Anyway here is what I did to touch on the picture.??It may be a bit hard to see some things that I did and I apologize ahead of time for that.??I'm using Windows 7 Paint now and tried out the natural pencil tool it had.??I also had to redo the sketch about 3 times before deciding to show this one.??Approximate time to touch up: 20 mins.